At Java Poetry’s open mic night at Greenbrier Library in Chesapeake on October 20, 2010, such good poetry was shared but more importantly shared with a tasteful dose of constructive criticism and insightful advice about writing poetry. Today brings to you the fifth and final review of Java Poetry’s October 2010 open mic!
At one point in the night, another topic of discussion brews this time about the points of views we use to tell the story of a poem. Click on over to Java Poetry’s October 2010 Review part 4, which focuses on the discussion of character creation and character definition within a poem.
When it was my turn, your Chesapeake Poetry Examiner, to come up to the podium, I read my two poems: Painted Destiny and Awoken From Slumber, Darkness Awaits. The latter is one of my favorites and I had also read this one at Nathan’s Poetry, Prose, and Pizza open mic, but also decided to share it at Java Poetry for those who weren’t in attendance at Nathan’s other poetry group.
Synnika Lofton’s [host of The Prime Time Poetry Show] response to Awoken From Slumber, Darkness Awaits: “Beautiful prose! Very descriptive, painting a beautiful picture!”
Synnika then gives the advice: “…let the writer paint the picture…” Meaning that it is up to the writer to paint with their descriptive words, the picture they wish to form in your mind.
Later in the night, I also went back up to the podium and read Sacred Voice of Silence, which provided a good topic of conversation about the techniques seen in that poem. Sacred Voice of Silence is essentially poetry about poetry, about a poet’s sacred voice of silence revealed to you more easily through the written word versus the spoken word.
Responses to Sacred Voice of Silence:
“That was good! I love it too!” – Nathan M. Richardson
“I like the switch from 1st person to 2nd person. It’s rare to use 2nd person, but you’ll find it from time to time. I love the texture of it, that fluid motion from I to YOU, love the rhythm of it! –Synnika Lofton
Sacred Voice of Silence brings up this conversation about what the different kinds of points of views used in writing are and how we use them. First and third person narratives are more commonly seen and used than second person narratives. What is second person narrative again? Second person point of view, as Synnika Lofton points out, “is usually like ‘instructions’ telling you I need you to do this, and this, and that…”
The part of Sacred Voice of Silence using the switch to the second person point of view is seen in these lines, highlighted in bold caps what is emphasized as second person narrative:
“…That’s where the poet, residing in me lies
in wait to reach YOUR truth-seeking eyes
daring to raise YOUR brows of confusion
awakening YOUR mind, YOUR heart, YOUR soul
the ability to touch, my sacred voice of silence…
if YOU dare desire to grasp this poet’s
true sacred voice…”
– written by Easter Dodds, Chesapeake Poetry Examiner
Discussion then continues with an in-depth look into these different points of view, as Nathan M. Richardson explains perfectly in his following quotes:
“The first thing about poetry is that it speaks to the soul without asking permission from the intellect. we’re not thinking about this or that being correct as in from what we learned in school.”
A beautiful example of the fact that poetry speaks to the soul and who a poet is, is revealed in Nathan’s poetic verse:
“A poet is not just a person
who likes to write things that sound poetic,
it’s a person who has a passion
for finding out the most perfect way to say it.”
– written by Nathan M. Richardson
“This is what’s important about this kind of poem because a lot of the time what we’re doing is, some of the things we might’ve missed in school, we are doing it subconsciously and we are getting it right and some things we’re getting it wrong. So what you have to do is go back and say, “okay, first person, third person… what are all these different nuances we are seeing?” When you know what you’re doing, then you can more frequently, when you write a new poem, use that technique in the next poem instead of stumbling upon it by happenstance. “
“I just write what I write and let it go with the flow”
– Easter Dodds, Chesapeake Poetry Examiner
“But if you didn’t do what you did, then you wouldn’t have gotten that poem.” –Synnika’s response
Be sure to check out all parts of Java Poetry’s Review: part 1, part 2, part 3 and part 4!
Java Poetry’s next open mic event is scheduled for Wednesday, November 17 at 7:00pm at Greenbrier Library on Volvo Parkway in Chesapeake and as always is FREE to attend! Mark your calendars now and hope to see you there!
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